Wiliford Mouse
liked to spend hours
sitting in the garden
smelling the flowers.
This little mouse
was quite a hoot
sniffing the pollen
with his yellow snoot.
He'd taste the petals,
lap up the dew
but when the cat
came stalking through
Wiliford tried hiding
under the pansies
but he couldn't help it
young Wiliford sneezed.
AH AH CHOOOOO!
Hey, Happy Thursday. I want to thank you for stopping by and reading my poem. I've used a slip rhyme, or assonance rhyme in the last stanza. If you can think of a flower that rhymes perfectly with sneezed, please let me know. That last stanza still needs work, but I'll get to it.
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Here is your challenge for today, can you write a poem that uses Ah-choo?
Joy,
ReplyDeleteI have no flower rhymes, although I thought you might could work in wheezed instead and show him trying to hold his breath and rework with petals, blossoms, or something less specific. I'm not the poet here, you'll get it. Have fun!
Thanks Linda,
ReplyDeleteMy critique group met today and I've got some other ideas for how to fix that last stanza. Thank you for you suggestions and willingness to help.