Morning sun
cuts over the skyline.
At the top
of the tallest juniper
perches a hawk
scanning the sky,
eyeing a telephone wire
with four noisy starlings.
Some days the poems just come out in free verse. I tried to work this information into a haiku, I certainly felt an "ah-ha" moment when I looked up to see a hawk in the tall juniper, and then I realized why he was turning his head to scan his surroundings. BUT, I had too much information to boil it down to a haiku. I thought about a fib, but that wouldn't work either. I'm just going to have to put more time into this poem if it is going to end up as something other than free verse. I think free verse is a good place to start to shape poems. So, your challenge for today is to spend a few moments just watching and listening. Then quickly write down the information in short items. Can you shape these into a poem so the reader can feel like they are in the same spot you are? Have fun.
I just wrote a poem about winter, and birds, Joy. I think we can see the few that are out there much more because of our bare trees. How great to have seen the hawk-so still they are when they watch! I enjoyed your free verse.
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ReplyDeleteI'm imagining that the hawk cuts across the sky soon too!
The poem definitely has a haiku feel, Joy. Have you tried it as a tanka poem?
ReplyDeleteI was nervous for the starlings at the end, and I don't even *like* starlings. Good job conveying mood, Joy!
ReplyDeleteHey, at least they aren't grackles. Now there is a bird I don't particularly like.
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