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Sunday, January 1, 2012

You Choose!

The Bickersons
live next door
to the Snideleys
in a town
where nothing is right.
"It's too hot," they complain
each day.
"It's too cold," they whine
each night.
They spend their time
in sputter and fight.

Now here is some advice
I have for you.
I read it in their Daily News;
whether you are happy or sad,
whether you are good or bad,
it is your life,
you get to choose.


     I think this poems is a little too pedantic to be considered a good poem.  What do you think?  I'll try to do better tomorrow.
     I was raised with the adage my mother always repeated, "You can catch more flies with honey than vinegar."  So, I think this poem has more vinegar in it than honey.  But, I must admit that my favorite part of the movie Bambi is when Thumper's mother asks him, "What did your father tell you?"
    And Thumper replies, "If you can't say anything nice, don't say anything at all."  
     I think all of this came to me because Toni McKain recently asked what I was trying to achieve with my poetry.  What message did I want to send?  It did get me thinking.  I guess what I'd really like is for the world to have more laughter.
     So today's challenge is to write a poem that will make someone laugh. 

3 comments:

  1. Hi Joy,
    What if a child from one or both families helps steer the adults in the right direction? (A child shall lead them) Perhaps the families could assist with service projects to fix the problems in the town. Consider making the problems stated more problematic like people hang out with nothing to do instead of the two families complaining about the weather. I'm looking forward to seeing the revision! We get to see the poem in revision. Fun! And a great learning experience.

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  2. hmm...I think it does start out silly and then does get a little preachy. The family names are good. Maybe they can keep doing the talking--their voices would probably write this poem differently! I like your goal--and usually your poems do make me smile!

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